2016年託福寫作高分技巧分析
無論是託福還是雅思寫作，在寫作中儘量使得文章簡潔，語言表達自然，還有結構清晰總是獲得高分的不變的技巧，簡潔是託福寫作非常重要的一點，很多考生往往在追求字數或是繁瑣句式的原因導致自己的託福文章非常囉嗦，考官印象總是不好的，分數就相對會拉低了
建議一： 避免空洞的單詞和詞組
1. 在託福寫作中，一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來任何相關的.或重要的信息，完全可以被刪掉。比如下面的句子：
When all things are considered， young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents， in my opinion.
這句話當中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多餘。完全可以去掉。改為：
Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.
2. 有些空洞和繁瑣的表達方式可以進行替換，例如：
Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents， they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.
“due to the fact that”就是一個很典型的繁瑣的表達方式的例子，可以替換，簡化為下面的表達方式：
Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents， they did not have the options that young people have now.
建議二： 避免重複
1. 在託福寫作中，儘量避免重複使用同樣的詞彙。或者有的時候雖然詞彙沒有重複，但意思卻有重複。這時候可以做一些簡化的工作。例如下面這個例子：
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.
large 對一個farm來説就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改為：
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.
更簡潔的表達方式為：
My grandfather grew up on a large farm.
2. 有時一個詞組可以用一個更簡單的單詞來替換，例如：
My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm.
這裏的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly，顯得更為簡潔：
My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm.
拓展閲讀：託福獨立寫作模板之成長規則
託福獨立寫作題目：家長應該為孩子的成功制定規則嗎?
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: parents must have strict rules to help their children to be successful.
Young people today are bound by a myriad of social and legal conventions, and it seems to me that these rules are excessive and often ineffective. Young people are governed by too many rules.
First are social conventions. In my country, young people are expected to follow a fairly standardized and linear path on the road to adulthood. "Responsibility" is the operative word. Schooling follows a certain road: K-12 education to prepare you for college, college to prepare you for work, work to prepare you for a respectable career and a brief period of independence before settling down as an adult. Deviating from this is generally frowned upon. It sounds terribly irresponsible to drop out of college and go backpacking through India, for example, and for many young people, it probably is. Then again, this is exactly what Steve Jobs did, and nobody can argue with those results. The problem here is that, while we mean well in enforcing these rules, they're highly inflexible and box the creativity of youth at a critical stage in their development. Social conventions, which were originally intended to anchor young people, instead end up restricting their paths of development.
Second are legal conventions. The laws governing the behavior of young people aren't really commensurate with the physical and emotional realities of youth. For example, in my country, you must be 18 in order to buy cigarettes and 21 to buy alcohol, but for some reason you only have to be 17 to go to war. This means that those too young to be trusted with the responsibility of vices like smoking and drinking might still be old enough to experience the trauma of military combat. Vices like smoking and drinking are irresponsible uses of time, because they tend to derail you from the life trajectory that society prescribes. Serving in the military, however, is not, because soldiering is the epitome of a standardized, linear, and responsible life. These laws only add up to an unclear message to youth about how they must be responsible but that we don’t trust them to be responsible. Such contradictory ideas are not beneficial to youth and their role in society.
Now, admittedly, young people do need guidelines when growing up. It's an oftentimes scary and confusing process. Without the right type of guidance, it can be very easy for young people to go down the wrong path. But sometimes the right type of guidance is no guidance, and sometimes taking the wrong path can teach you how to find the one you're meant for. The problem with the rules confronting young people today is they're too many and too inflexible. They don't encourage young people to learn, to adapt, or to find their own way. And they don't trust young people. All they do is stunt the growth of a generation of youths, who then go on to foist the same lousy system on the next generation. To me, this isn't a system that begets "responsibility."
So yes, I think society has created too many rules for young people. The only way things will improve is if we give them a little more freedom and trust in finding their own way, while still being there to provide guidance should they want it. When they finally do acquire a sense of responsibility, it'll be because they grasped the concept themselves. (Richard, 561 words)
